Yes. I agree. The self-referential elements-- "I" and "my" have to be modified so that the poet's capturing the moment -- as haikus are about moments ...
I think I know who wrote this. :smile: But, then, I've been surprised before. The writer has maintained the flavor of the story without fail. The over...
Thank you to our poets. :heart: It's almost impossible to write an excellent poem in a short amount of time. Poems are something you micromanage in yo...
I'm not sure I want to make a comment on this story. But I want to say, he thought of coming to the rescue of the two cyclists first, and not immediat...
Yes! A good one. The narrator equates the noises/sounds with how the person in the next room feels. I'm not sure about the opening line -- I would hav...
I upvoted this poem. The only thing I would change is to remove the poet's self-referencing "I"-- he/she can reflect on what was once a loved companio...
I would prefer the third-person narrator to have more voice in the story. The use of dialogues exclusively takes away the humanity of both the doctor ...
It needs editing to shorten it. It doesn't have to be this long. The narrator is a droner and seems to be out of touch with reality. He's going for a ...
Good story telling. The writer put a lot of effort into the details of the story. This is not a subject matter that's easy to write for the readers' e...
I enjoyed it. But this line caught my eye first before anything else in the poem. And so, my mind literally thought of horror. I apologize -- but "col...
Normally I don't like this style of writing -- the fantastic and phantasm. But this poem throws me off then brings me back to senses because of the co...
The story is simple -- homeliness as you say -- but it has a meaning behind the title. Raymond Carver's Cathedral was written in a modest narration --...
I wanted something to happen. The museum itself should have been the backdrop for an incident. It was a good exploratory piece, but that's where it en...
I'm not very fond of this diary style fiction. The narrator reminisces the past with fondness -- which is a good element in a story -- then brings the...
Did our narrator meet the same fate as the tourist he strangled at the beginning? It sounds like it. The world that's described in the narrative seems...
@"Benkei", I find it actually functional -- it explains further, which helps the readers. If I could make a change, it would be that I would make a li...
Oops. Sorry, Benk. I forgot to include in my message to you that all entries will be posted at the same time at the end of July. I find that fragrant ...
This is by Matsou Basho: The old pond A frog leaps in. Sound of the water. The poem answers the three questions: where, when, and what. So, the two po...
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