Amity

You don't like the blunt reality of mental or physical suffering/abuse in stories? I don't think that it is as easy as that. She sees things/life in m...

I know you do. I've read your stories :smile: Where do you imagine things could be better in the story? What would it take without spelling it out and...

I love this but finding it difficult. I've looked up Double Helix. My brain is scientifically challenged. Shed a little light, please? I've done that....

:rofl: Oh my God. You've done it again. You kill me. Please never leave TPF, I beg you :pray:

I love this. On a re-read to better appreciate. Oh. That's such a pity. You don't like having to use your imagination to fill in any gaps? Self-mutila...

I am sure the author will appreciate this detailed feedback. Love the analogy. Is that why some stories seem to rely on divisions or parts? Not for ae...

Oh, well spotted :up: *** Hmmm. We have 2 authors who like to split things up like that. @"Jamal" - my first guess. See his Plum Pudding Pie winner, C...

:grin: You have pouting competitions? We need to see the pics :wink:

:lol: :clap: I wanna shout "You da man!" but how acceptable would that be? :chin:

Sorry, I meant revisions in the previous contests. I'm not even sure I'm right! I am sure authors and readers appreciate all your constructive feedbac...

OK. I knew you would :up: I forgot to ask @"Benkei" and @"Vera Mont". No need to answer, of course...

So, how did you vote?

Seconded as to three classes :up: I think we have only had a few attempts at revision. By @"Baden" and possibly @"Jamal". Oh, and @"Benkei" too :chin:

Well yes, it would! I wonder why they allowed it to be exhibited with such an obvious flaw? I'm laughing now at the memory of my eagle eyes picking ou...

The knowledge of our own and others' eventual death exerts an influence on our lives. Whether we like it or not. Recognise or Deny. We cope by keeping...

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You know it :wink: Nah, I'd rather drink Irn Bru with chips and a deep-fried Mars bar. A slow death :monkey:

Yeah, it's difficult. I too am guilty of that. Ignoring other aspects. Imperfect beings, whot?! :smile:

You know more about Death than I or me. It seems.

Understood. I was looking at it from a different perspective. That of peering at drops of paint and not standing back to appreciate the overall pictur...

What is it about writer/readers that can't get past pernickety points of grammar? Stuck there in an 'it' ('The hairpin') or a 'usual' ('The Inseparabl...

He does know about the cancer, past. But he is speculating about the future. He is keeping an eye on events as they unfold. Prepared to be there...as ...

Noticing is fine. That's the idea. They are intentional; designed to attract attention not to annoyingly distract. It's not about ignorance of synonym...

Blood and gore and guts and veins in my teeth. My God, what kind of animal is this? A devouring, voracious carnivore...hmm... Must be a human 'he' :wi...

I'm sure of it :scream:

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Well said. I didn't have the words. I hope @"javi2541997" is listening carefully :sparkle:

Well, it's short and sweet...and not a tiresome wrangling of... Best leave it there :sparkle:

Good to know that Death is not hovering over your shoulder. Perhaps you have a guardian angel :halo: Take care :sparkle: Edit: To clarify, I meant the...

'apparently dull'. The hovering spirit of Death might have that effect :death:

You are easily distracted :wink: Why would an author 'usually' repeat a word, in this case 'usual'? Why, given the word limit and need to use every wo...

There should be 3 categories. Top one: I love it. The story has a singular shine. Black matt to white gloss. No need for more polish, in my opinion. H...

The Inseparable Unable or unwilling to be separated. The phrase that comes to mind, after a first reading: 'Until Death Do Us Part'. A wedding vow. St...

Drive, He Said A lovely story of sweet revenge by a thinking/talking/driving inanimate on her arrogant, entitled 'master'. I hope her hood survived to...

Premises and Conclusion Reminds me a little of that brilliant novel: Klara and the Sun by Kazuo Ishiguro. Marci and Mark - artificial friends. Android...

Derivative Hilarious :hearts:

How I met your mother My take: They were made for each other. Nutters driving and dancing. I think the mother is a murdering psychopath - failed in he...

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Again, you make assumptions. It is not my story and I'm not taking it personally. I am not and never will be 'hurt' by TPF comments; so, you're good. ...

Yes. The title was 'imposed' but any potential stories could have been from all kinds of perspectives. From cradle to grave. As a distant observer or ...

I hope you feel better today. A lovely response to the story. I'm now gonna have to visit Edgar :nerd:

I am not sure you understand the point I was making: It related to encouraging more TPF members into the Exhibition/Contest. That is: I think it is go...

Fantastico :cool:

Why is it not positive for more TPF participants to be lured into the Short Story 4 - Microfiction thread?

:up: Never heard that before. In full translation: "In short, the greyhound runs more than the mastiff; But if the road is long, the mastiff runs more...

You can lead a horse to water but you can’t make it drink :sparkle:

:lol: Caught more micro readers, yay! The author did well. Don't really know about 'eldritch' and haven't had time to read it properly. Your descripti...

You think that is 'why most of the members like this story'?

Catching the 'simplistic'. There is simply no hope for you :brow:

More thoughts. The short final sentences of each part relieve the suspense of questions of identity: 1. I am her silver hairpin 2. I am her pillow 3. ...