Amity

Feel free to do both, or more! :wink: :rofl: :naughty: :groan: :heart:

It is about both. The stimulus and the response. I agree it is difficult to write about a Muslim character. Ahmir is a Scottish-Muslim. We could go to...

I appreciate your analysis. As a reader, being immersed and connected to the story is one of life's most satisfying experiences. I also like to become...

Excellent! At reading and understanding the stories, communicating this to others, you are the very best. As an author, too, you are right up there! :...

Thanks for explaining that. I did wonder as to the detail and clarity of the dreams with specific places and people. I think it was difficult for me b...

I don't understand why there is so much fuss about something so trivial. I didn't even think twice about it. I assumed it had been done along the way....

Oh, yeah? I can feel the heat from your head. How is it strange? Interesting. Where does it say that the transplanted organ is a heart? Yes. That was ...

As always, your 2 pennies are most welcome. :sparkle: :flower:

Yes, well. It was supposed to be a surprise. A nice one. Not a trick. I'm sorry that you see it this way. It was only meant to show Ahmir's ignorance....

I agree. But the consensus was that people would participate more if the topic was left open. *shrugs* Exactly this. From a wide spectrum of perspecti...

Oh. I will definitely need to read this again. I have missed something. :scream:

Changes: I'm smiling at this and how my story began and how it ended, still in a heap of confusion. The chaos of a spinning mind had to be reined in. ...

I'm returning to this favourite story to catch any 'mental glinches'. I wrote this earlier, in another thread, Bulbs in Pots: Even when I take care an...

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You seem not to have noticed this further feedback. You didn't respond to it or the examples I gave. What are your thoughts?

I think all stories can be seen as a work-in-progress. Even if they are considered 'polished'. Writing is an art and serious writers progress through ...

:smile: Thank you. I think a quick first scan is OK to get the feel of a short story. But to leave it at that, especially when confused, is not fine. ...

Interesting. Once you know that trick, it's an easy signal that there is a transition in consciousness. What follows is not 'real'. Perhaps, it can be...

I thought I did that a little:

Or it might have been a childbirth disaster...both died. Either way, it is a tragedy and a loss. Poignant.

I'd best get back to other stories for a re-read. Taking up too much space here. Later...

Apparently *coughs* by somely dastardous accounting, it is frownly upon to use too many of eitherly.

Hilarious. Love it :lol: :up: :love:

I think you know this but just to clarify: - ly endings are adverbs. Adjectives: chaotic and harmonious. Nouns: chaos and harmony. I think anyone can ...

I had never heard of the name Ahmir before! I chose the name from a list and kinda smiled at how a Scot might say, "A'm 'ere!" to indicate his presenc...

OK. Understood. He is a complex character and I didn't spell it out as much as you would have liked. I simply left things hanging around like his lone...

No. It's not in the chapel. Although that would have been a nice touch. The slate fell from the hotel roof as she was coming out of it with Sophie. So...

When I read that I sighed with relief. Thanks for your encouragement. :sparkle: Believe it or not, I've never read Salman Rushdie. I'm beginning to un...

Thank you. I think you are the first to mention Greta. Everyone else has been concerned with Ahmir. If you don't mind me asking - what did you find in...

Yes. I didn't mean it to be a psychological evaluation. But look what came out! Yes. Sophie was the only one that didn't change. Other than finding BC...

Nope. What fundamentalist rants? Ahmir was no fundamentalist but he did rant in frustration. He is ignorant and mixed-up. Brought up in a mixed race f...

That made me laugh! Imagining you sitting cross-legged. A cross-eyed squinty cat :monkey:

Hope that my explanation along with Vera's has helped! Thanks :smile:

OK. Here's the thing about Ahmir. He isn't a stereotype. I shouldn't have tried to be clever or tricky. I did intend to lead the reader astray by the ...

Thanks. You are not alone. I have the answers but you have to torture me with questions! And then, I might have to kill ya' :wink:

Hah! Best she remain an enigma. Wouldn't want to spoil the magic of imagination. :flower:

I'm not quite sure what you are trying to say here :chin: You can't mean British as opposed to Scottish? Yes, sorry about the confusion. I guess it's ...

Succinct as ever! Thanks, Vera. It is a bit mixed-up. Just like poor Ahmir...

It was a typo. And I don't know how I missed it. I read and re-read umpteen times. Perhaps I was dazzled by the lights shining down. Ah, you need to r...

The Invisible Contorter What have we got here? A twisting form. A shape shifter. A fantasy transformation. An imaginary friend or foe? And we can't se...

Hey guys, Baden has let me loose! :cool: The feedback has been interesting. Listen to Vera! She is right where it matters. I'll return later with some...

:up: As the philosopher Marilyn Monroe once commented: " If I'd observed all the rules, I'd never have got anywhere." As the philosopher Marilyn Monro...

OK, thanks. Time for me to give it a rest. G'night! :yawn:

:up: Thanks and to clarify: Once revealed, by others, the authors can take part in the story discussion?

:smile: Where would we be without people telling their stories, fiction or otherwise. Love this activity :clap: :fire:

@"Baden" and @"Noble Dust" - I think once authors have been identified, even before the designated time, we have a right to reply. Yes/No?

I'll give it a miss. But here's the link: https://thephilosophyforum.com/discussion/14546/red-white-and-blue-by-amity/p1

:smile: It doesn't matter. I think most know by now, anyway. What matters is the story. To be discussed...

A philosophy teacher, angry? That can't possibly be! Perhaps he just didn't like your style :wink: So, how long did it take for you to change your min...

This is not fair. If you have outed me, then I should be able to respond! @"Baden" and @"Noble Dust" - I think once authors have been identified, even...