Yes, that's what I meant with true post-modernism often scrambling the meaning of normal prose. But it still requires the intention of being post-mode...
I've already abandoned that notion, but it was triggered by the weird paragraph structures, the choppy repetitions of actions that didn't flow in and ...
What I meant is that clarity for the character makes the character do things that the reader aren't aware the reasons for, or rather they get constant...
This is the place at the moment as we're talking about it in a broad sense. I'm not flooding that into someone's specific story discussion. We seem to...
But none of that has to do with the re-arranged order of actions that I described. Giving the punchline point of the metaphorical language the final b...
The character doesn't have to be omniscient, but the descriptions need a perspective. From whose perspective does the metaphorical description come fr...
Or that it's just purple prose. “The jar sits on the table like the lone leaf of a dying tree." What does this mean? Metaphors and evocative descripti...
Not to get this thread into a general discussion about the stories (I think that's supposed to be in the upcoming favorites thread), but I think the i...
I liked that end quote, but the thing I wondered about is if there even is a pay-back when he doesn't seem to care about the experiences that invade h...
Unfortunately I felt like that because all the things he specifically thinks about, refers to and mentions usually is the composition of an Islamic fu...
I think the reason it doesn’t work for me is because there’s no reason for it being a shock revelation. If it’s indeed written as intended, then I don...
It was primarily the way it's written, with a poetic flow of descriptive language that never repeats and is neither overwritten nor underwritten. On t...
My current guesses. Some are deduced into certainty while others are less certain. "The Unrighted Leotard" by Hanover Seems his style "Kingdom Come, I...
One also has to be ready to receive criticism and feedback when presenting a creation to the world. The art of giving critique is just as complex as h...
I would be more sympathetic if you didn’t send private messages calling me a stupid ass because I gave feedback trying to figure out the writing. I di...
It's still the stereotypical muslim fundamentalist. All these are point by point the kind of attributes that gets ticked off. Doesn't matter if he's a...
I loved it. It's satire-gold and while other's have said it's too on the nose, it's that on the noseness that brings the laughs. And I laughed out lou...
Competent writing and there's some interesting scenes, but as the others, I'm not sure about the meaning of it all. Had a hard time with the Ahmir cha...
While there was some fun parts in isolation, I didn't find much to hold onto with this. It reads like pure free writing, going in random directions al...
I feel there's a good story here that's being obstructed by language. Feels like the grammar comes from a bad translation or some software translation...
This is the same thing as screenings for movies during post production. Gathering a consensus of critique in order to find issues that aren’t just ind...
Precisely. Any perspective of our consciousness being a higher state or more special than everything else in reality is a conjecture based in our emot...
Isn't your argument relying on the Von Neumann–Wigner interpretation of quantum physics? And Schrödinger's cat wasn't a proposed concept of how things...
Not sure how you mean? I thought it was great to introduce a character in writing with lower-case r and the confusion why it's lower-case then explain...
Not sure why, but the Simon Stålenhag vibe of the atmosphere came to mind reading this for some reason. Maybe it's the nostalgic 90s with a magical re...
On the other hand, you do write serial-post long reflections and feedback on each story that I would believe takes up a lot of your time, and is very ...
Isn't that what most lives are like? People wandering through complex, but repetitious and routine tasks only to fall to their knees and cry in despai...
I find it that people act more in line with this story than they would ever ask straight out like that. People tend to dwell on minor things to have g...
Yes, true and I agree that some non-fluent texts are also brilliant. But in a case where a flow like this is apparent in the text I'm just saying I ca...
For myself I think such nuances went a bit over my head as it's a bit more advanced than my current English skills. For me, the poetic flow becomes mo...
This is a bit of a mixed bag. I liked the mid-90s feeling in which I can easily sense the rainy air, smells and light quality of the setting. It's lik...
As long as the text isn't funneled into training data without the author's consent thought. Although that might just happen by the nature of existing ...
This was fun. Transforming God and the heavens into an almost Sovietian style of bureaucratic agency in which we read a report by sloppy low level hal...
This is superbly written, masterfully crafted prose that just flow and flow without hiccups. I'm deeply jealous and in awe of the craftmanship of word...
I think the reflective line of thoughts about his situation works as a concept and ideas for a story about a failed tomb raider type of character, but...
Yes, but the story does not paint things in this manner until basically a one sentence description of Stevie listening in. The entire story is not set...
A simple man wouldn't make a likeness description that's more in need of abstract thinking than necessary. I think a simple man would rather do the op...
I'm not opposed to a creative flair of abstract descriptions and choice of language, but I feel a story needs to have a consistent style aesthetic thr...
Read it twice as well, but I felt it's a bit rough. It might be that it has been translated or use a descriptive language that has a different cultura...
I agree that this is a factor, but I think that this place of all places surely would have more people able to deal with longer written text. Maybe it...
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