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The Ballad of Marco by Michael

Baden December 24, 2021 at 23:49 2250 views 67 comments
[Editor Note: This story is actually below the specified word count. This is no fault of the entrant but mine for not noticing.]

Once upon a time there lived a boy named Marco. Marco was a perfectly ordinary boy except for the fact that he was an annoying fucking twat. None of the other boys and girls liked to play with Marco and so they kicked him out of their group. There was much rejoicing.

But Marco, being an annoying fucking twat, couldn’t just accept it. Day after day he would try to weasel his way back in – no offence meant to weasels – with a new name, hoping to trick the other boys and girls into liking him. But it never worked – for Marco had a very telling tell; he was an annoying fucking twat. And so day after day he was unceremoniously kicked out anew.

Yet he kept on coming. They say it was because he had no friends and no life, which was probably true; he was an annoying fucking twat after all. His only company were the pigs and goats on the farm where he went to hide. They understandably didn’t like him either.

Thankfully the other boys and girls were much smarter than Marco. To keep him away they created five guardian puzzles that must first be solved before anyone new could join their group. This made things very hard for Marco. He wasn’t very clever and so he often failed to solve even one puzzle. There was much rejoicing.

Yet he kept on coming.

Then one day, on Christmas Eve, he stopped, and nobody ever saw Marco again. He’d fallen asleep on the farm and been eaten by the goats and pigs. There was much rejoicing.

And this is the true story of why the pig and the goat are sacred animals to this very special community. They’ll eat anything, even annoying fucking twats like Marco.

This wasn’t actually a ballad. Merry Christmas!

Comments (67)

john27 December 25, 2021 at 20:28 #634853
Brings a tear to my eye. Sensational.
god must be atheist December 25, 2021 at 21:11 #634876
I think half of the board participants here said after reading, (or could say if they read the story) "Hesus, it's about me. How can I hide my shame?"

While in the meantime the other half of the board participants said, including the moderators, organizers, owners and other authority figures, "Hesus, it's about me. How can I hide my shame?"

Caveat: this is not my view of others. It's how I imagine they view themselves. How do I know? Because I view myself this way as shown in the story.
praxis December 25, 2021 at 21:46 #634900
:sad:
Baden December 25, 2021 at 22:46 #634940
Reply to praxis

Don't much like these cliched happy endings either. Twat annoys everyone then gets eaten by goats and pigs. Been done a million times. Prefer mine a little darker.
praxis December 25, 2021 at 22:51 #634942
I'm not unsympathetic, I guess that I just couldn't quite catch the tune of the ballad.
Amity December 26, 2021 at 09:42 #635079
***Please Note***
Author eventually revealed to be a mod; the 'story' an in-joke.
https://thephilosophyforum.com/discussion/comment/637540
Original comments stand; to be read keeping above note in mind.

The Ballad of Marco
Quoting Baden
This wasn’t actually a ballad. Merry Christmas!


No, it wasn't a ballad but it did have a recurring refrain or motif.
'Marco' is a repetitive and persistent 'annoying fucking twat' not liked by a 'very special community'.
Rejected to 'much rejoicing', he 'tricked' his way back not once, not twice but the magical 3 times until the 4th...by changing his name...

Sound familiar ?

A Ballad of Jesse James, this is not. Nor is it a ballad of Marco Polo.
It is a steady drip-drip-drip. If you are unkind, 'Chinese Water Torture' might spring to mind.
No pleasing sound of a song to dance to. No joyful spirit.
No Bush Ballad 'Waltzing Matilda' is this. But it isn't meant to be.

Clearly a reference to TPF and a sense of not being accepted.
[Note well, this is my mere opinion *]

Rejection personified and projected on to a 'Marco'; someone he sympathises with, yet who tricked him.
A hurt, sensitive and yet strong writer who carries on believing and wishing everyone a 'Merry Christmas'.
Wonderful sharing. Thanks for the mocking come back. A telling tell tale :smile:

Quite admirable but a change in thinking pattern might go a long way.
As [s]Marco[/s] Marcus Aurelius would say:

“Dwell on the beauty of life. Watch the stars, and see yourself running with them.”
“The happiness of your life depends upon the quality of your thoughts.”
“If you are distressed by anything external, the pain is not due to the thing itself, but to your estimate of it; and this you have the power to revoke at any moment.”

*
“Everything we hear is an opinion, not a fact. Everything we see is a perspective, not the truth.”

Take care. Live well and safely :sparkle:

[ https://www.goodreads.com/author/quotes/17212.Marcus_Aurelius
but better to read the longer story - the Meditations ]


Jamal December 26, 2021 at 09:55 #635084
I must be an idiot. I have no idea how I managed to read this twice before I realised what it was about. :lol:

Many of the readers won’t be aware of the TPF drama behind this story, but otherwise: :clap:
Amity December 26, 2021 at 10:00 #635088
Quoting jamalrob
I must be an idiot.


????? ! :wink:
Jamal December 26, 2021 at 10:03 #635089
Reply to Amity Alas, it’s true. But I blame the immersive and mesmerising prose.
Amity December 26, 2021 at 10:06 #635090
Quoting jamalrob
I blame the immersive and mesmerising prose.


Hypnotic, huh :yawn:
The buzz of a bee with a sting in its tale.
Jamal December 26, 2021 at 10:11 #635092
Although it’s a kind of joke entry, the writing is very good and it would be nice to see a longer story from this author next time.
Amity December 26, 2021 at 10:29 #635101
Quoting jamalrob
it would be nice to see a longer story from this author next time.


Yes. He has insight and a way with words which draw you in...to his world.
Brave, really, to so expose self...the pain, mixed with humour, is felt.
:broken: >>> :groan: >>> :smile: >>> :razz: >>> :nerd: >>> :heart:

Easy to have and write opinionated comment. Short story telling is on another level. Right up there !
I admire all who do this :100:
Jamal December 26, 2021 at 11:40 #635120
Quoting Amity
Easy to have and write opinionated comment. Short story telling is on another level.


I might have to disagree with you here. I admire your dedication and skill in commenting on these stories so constructively. I find I can’t do it very easily myself. By habit or whatever it is, I seem to focus too much on the negatives. I don’t think my criticisms are wrong, it’s just that I don’t balance them out with positive and helpful comments. So I tend to refrain from commenting at all, as I know how important it is not to put people off.

EDIT: btw I’m talking in general here, not specifically about this competition. It’s not like for every story I haven’t commented on I have a raft of vicious criticisms.
Amity December 26, 2021 at 12:36 #635135
Quoting jamalrob
I might have to disagree with you here.


I think I can live with that :grin:

Quoting jamalrob
It’s not like for every story I haven’t commented on I have a raft of vicious criticisms.


You are a most brilliantly balanced personage, so you are.
Very kind indeedy. So there :razz:
Now shut up and carry on commenting :up:

Jamal December 26, 2021 at 12:44 #635138
Reply to Amity :grin: :pray:
god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 13:28 #635153
Quoting jamalrob
I must be an idiot. I have no idea how I managed to read this twice before I realised what it was about. :lol:

Many of the readers won’t be aware of the TPF drama behind this story, but otherwise: :clap:


You could have read the second comment, right after John27's, and the message would haver revealed itself to you.

I am glad that eventually you came to the same conclusion.
Jamal December 26, 2021 at 13:29 #635154
Reply to god must be atheist I did read it, but I’m slow on the uptake.
god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 13:31 #635155
The form was consistent, and it had a cadence. The reader was proven something, that the reader desperately needed to see reversed, and it was never reversed. Like hitting a stake into the ground until its top is level with the ground.

I liked this piece the best, for it was short, to the point, and its punch did not get lost in the myriads of words like in the other pieces I read.

"Words, words, words."
god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 13:33 #635156
Quoting jamalrob
I did read it, but I’m slow on the uptake.
Or maybe I am incomprehensible... it happens.

god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 13:35 #635158
Quoting Amity
:broken: >>> :groan: >>> :smile: >>> :razz: >>> :nerd: >>> :heart:


Are you by any chance a professional editrix, critic or literar? A woman of letters? Essayist?
god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 13:42 #635161
Quoting Baden
Don't much like these cliched happy endings either. Twat annoys everyone then gets eaten by goats and pigs. Been done a million times. Prefer mine a little darker.


Noticing your preferences, Baden, I have a novel published that you would like to buy. But I shall put it on public display here, in its entirety, for your ease of access to it:

"Twat gets fucked. The End."

It sold upwards of two hundred thousand copies already.
Amity December 26, 2021 at 13:51 #635166
Quoting god must be atheist
Are you by any chance a professional editrix, critic or literar? A woman of letters? Essayist?


No.

Writing letters, I used to love.
A correspondent could add letters to my name, if they knew what they were.
But this would puzzle the postie. Who is this ?
Only academic essays written, a lifetime ago.

Why do you ask ?
Do you think I could be a literary essayist ?
I have scant imagination for fiction. Nada.

I enjoy reading, thinking and writing here. Strange but true.

god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 14:00 #635171
Reply to Amity

I knew you were not a writer of fiction, but a responder to it. This is more intuited than I could support with reasons. But my earlier question to you I can explain:

Why I asked?

1. I find your points are spot on.
2. You have a unique, creative, and enaging and refreshing way to express your opinions. Enthused, uplifting, full of alacrity.
3. You are quick in your response, and hence, either a natural at it or experienced. Naturally smooth in the seamlessness, or else chiselled or well-oiled by experience.
4. Finally, last but not least, you're just as emotional as cerebral. Your posts are dripping with feelings and supportive praise, but not at all with empty compliments.

Hard to find these days.
Amity December 26, 2021 at 14:04 #635172
Quoting god must be atheist
Hard to find these days.


Consider me bemused and stunned. But best get on with the job at hand, eh :wink:
Thanks.
god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 14:06 #635174
Quoting Amity
A correspondent could add letters to my name, if they knew what they were.


The only letters to add to your name that come up naturally are "-ville Horror". Title of an old movie.Quoting Amity
Do you think I could be a literary essayist ?
I have scant imagination for fiction. Nada.


Essayists need no imagination, only keen insight and an ability to see things when they read. Only someone blind could not see that you have that.

Anyone with a college education can add letters to their names, to trail them, and the letters are more and more diverse. So the field is wide open. Then again, you said it would confuse the mailperson. Be he or she a maleperson or a felmaleperson. That's a clue, and I know I still won't get it, but I'll work on it before giving up. Could it be you have a short Asian name, and the letters after your name would spell an expletive in English? This is the first thing that popped into my head.
god must be atheist December 26, 2021 at 14:08 #635175
Oh, yes. Cal.
Outlander December 26, 2021 at 21:00 #635390
I'll bite. Who is this "person" who probably pays no attention to this site or anyone here except maybe a few seconds when he's bored a couple times a year that just.. lives on omniscient in everybody's minds here? What did he do? Was it really his fault? Would it not just have been somebody else? Is it not better the devil you know?

I got a theory about this Marco guy. He doesn't exist. He never did. He's some sort of mass delusion. Every time a light bulb burns out, a car cuts you off, or it's suddenly too chilly in your bedroom, Marco did it! You people have created your own religion with it's own gods and demons in the form of this Marco delusion. Enough already! Also the possibility that jamalrob is actually a closet masochist who answers to the name "Marco" is not entirely off the table either.

Just the thoughts of a man who refused to respond "polo".
john27 December 26, 2021 at 21:08 #635391
Quoting Outlander
Just the thoughts of a man who refused to respond "polo".


Damn, thats deep.
Baden December 26, 2021 at 23:21 #635431
Quoting Outlander
I got a theory about this Marco guy. He doesn't exist. He never did. He's some sort of mass delusion. Every time a light bulb burns out, a car cuts you off, or it's suddenly too chilly in your bedroom, Marco did it! You people have created your own religion with it's own gods and demons in the form of this Marco delusion. Enough already! Also the possibility that jamalrob is actually a closet masochist who answers to the name "Marco" is not entirely off the table either.


:up:
Hanover December 27, 2021 at 01:32 #635512
Americans don't use the word "twat" to describe an annoying person like this, especially not a man. Maybe asshole is an equivalent or something. "Twat" would be a couple of notches lower on the insult scale from "cunt" to describe a revolting woman, but it would be somewhat comical, considering it's rarely used and sounds like someone is trying to come up with a vulgar and creative insult.

That's what I focused on. Not sure what the rest of the story was going on about.
Amity December 27, 2021 at 08:47 #635684
Quoting Hanover
...sounds like someone is trying to come up with a vulgar and creative insult.

That's what I focused on. Not sure what the rest of the story was going on about.


Sad to say, there's nothing particularly creative about that insult.
But yes, the author can be 'trying' in so many ways.
I hope he feels better for having got it out of his system...writing therapy, huh.





180 Proof December 27, 2021 at 18:44 #635839
If the author is a mod, "The Ballad ..." is kinda meta reminiscent of some "annoying fucking twats" who were banned in the last several months. I'm sure we all have our own "Marco" or two in mind. :smirk:
Amity December 27, 2021 at 19:58 #635874
Reply to Baden
Oh, so now I think I got it all wrong :cry:
@Baden :naughty:
Amity December 27, 2021 at 20:44 #635888
Quoting 180 Proof
If the author is a mod, "The Ballad ..." is kinda meta reminiscent of some "annoying fucking twats" who were banned in the last several months. I'm sure we all have our own "Marco" or two in mind. :smirk:


Yep. Trouble with having a particular person in mind as an author, it can trip you up.
Tunnel vision.
I got it bad.

Gotta love all the references to 'idiot' or 'eejit'.
That eejit. C'est moi :cry: .
How will I ever cope with this realisation?
Writing therapy :wink:

gikehef947 December 27, 2021 at 20:45 #635889
Reply to Baden Goats are herbivores. Let's see if you document yourself a little better next time.
Amity December 27, 2021 at 20:47 #635891
Quoting gikehef947
Goats are herbivores. Let's see if you document yourself a little better next time.


But it works if 'Marco' is a plant in a fictional story, right ? :wink:
gikehef947 December 27, 2021 at 20:53 #635893
Reply to Amity
I find it easy to make a shorter and more depressing story.
Amity December 27, 2021 at 20:55 #635896
Quoting gikehef947
I find it easy to make a shorter and more depressing story.


Example?
gikehef947 December 27, 2021 at 20:57 #635898
Reply to Amity
Mom, why are you giving me cupcakes in June?
Marco, do you think that with your cancer you will eat it to Christmas?
Amity December 27, 2021 at 21:17 #635904
Reply to gikehef947
That's a joke and it doesn't work.
Nils Loc December 27, 2021 at 22:39 #635934
We've now planted the seed of karmic evil.

A goat screamed and wretched as it trembled to its knees amongst the brush. Black blood gushed from its mouth as its eyes gleaned with brimstone fire. Marco, now digested by an animal soul, was resurrecting into something new and horrid. Bones twisted and cracked as the sinews of Marco's new flesh brought him upright onto his hairy hind quarters.

"The story must go on..." a demonic voice echoed in Marco's horny head. "I've gifted you with the curse of twat contagion. Go make twats of them all and bring them into the fold of my dominion."




Amity December 29, 2021 at 06:01 #636301
Quoting Hanover
Americans don't use the word "twat" to describe an annoying person like this, especially not a man.


Hah. Excellent example of Misdirection.
Could easily be written by you !
Yes indeed.



Amity January 01, 2022 at 07:52 #637540
All is revealed.
From@jamalrob

.:'Well, here's my take. The Marco story should never have been included, being under 500 words and just a moderators' in-joke entry anyway. But it was included, because, understandably, @Baden didn't take it very seriously and never imagined it would get votes.'



Jamal January 01, 2022 at 07:55 #637541
Reply to Amity Well, that was my opinion. But it's possible it wasn't a moderator, and Baden in fact didn't notice it was under the requisite word count.
Amity January 01, 2022 at 07:57 #637542
Reply to jamalrob
Whatever.
The whole thing has become a joke; no longer participating. Bye.
Jamal January 01, 2022 at 08:00 #637543
What I'm saying is, I wasn't "revealing" anything, except that there's been an ongoing problem with a guy called Marco, which only a few non-staff members knew about.

Reply to Amity Who exactly are you upset with? Most authors participated in good faith and have no doubt appreciated your comments. Don't throw the baby out.
Baden January 01, 2022 at 12:35 #637569
Reply to jamalrob

It was a mod, but I didn't notice it was a bit under. I wasnt being super strict about the word count. Though I did reject a mod story the last time round for being under it because it was obvious. It's true though that I didn't take it seriously as with the AI story the last time.
Jamal January 01, 2022 at 12:46 #637573
Reply to Baden Not the end of the world anyway. The author can be publicly shamed in a few days and everything will be made right again. Keep up the good work. :grin:
Baden January 01, 2022 at 13:04 #637577
Reply to jamalrob

The author was just having a laugh and it's not his fault I didn't notice the word count, but we should probably tar and feather him anyway to take the attention off me. :party:
praxis January 01, 2022 at 18:57 #637635
The mod note is a good step towards fairness. To go all the way I suggest something like the following.

[Mod Note: This story was not written in good faith but as a moderator in-joke and just to have a laugh (or whatever). Considering the comments, it's probably an effective attempt to do that for the mods, so it will be left alone regardless of the harm. Oh, and the author didn’t even bother to meet the minimum word count and that’s okay because, well, to be honest, it’s okay because we’re mods. Tehee. :snicker: ]
Baden January 01, 2022 at 19:06 #637636
Reply to praxis

Very funny... But why then did I reject fdrake's story for being too short (in the previous competition). Last time I looked he's a mod too (and even from "The British Isles!"). Riddle me that, Sherlock.
praxis January 01, 2022 at 19:45 #637644
Quoting Baden
why then did I reject fdrake's story for being too short (in the previous competition).


Elementary, my dear Baden, you simply didn’t like it as much.
Baden January 01, 2022 at 20:06 #637650
Reply to praxis

Meh, as mentioned, didn't fancy the happy ending. Much Hollywood. Like mine darker and Frencher. Marco should have lived and spoke French more.

praxis January 01, 2022 at 20:11 #637654
Reply to Baden

Whatever you say, Mr. Wonka.
Nils Loc January 01, 2022 at 21:31 #637676
De quel côté tombe l'injustice, d'une chute tragique contre les nombreux joyeux ? Un con n'est pas un criminel. Mais si tout est mécanique au cœur de la nature, vaste et indifférente, que deviendrons-nous alors ?

Oh chèvre !
Tes bleets inaudibles déchirent le cœur
de l'homme,
Comme la nature s'enfonce dans les champs du vide.


Baden January 01, 2022 at 21:59 #637690
Reply to Nils Loc

:love: Ah, le terrible infini nous consume tous. Les chèvres et les cochons mâchent les restes.
praxis January 02, 2022 at 21:00 #638000
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Nils Loc January 02, 2022 at 22:14 #638020
Reply to praxis

:fire: Careful, someone will steal that and make it an NFT. Then they will buy a metaphorical crown and relax in their new found millions as they enjoy the strange love children of the Ballad of Marco.

"Listen here son. We owe our wealth to a happy accident, a twat, named Marco."

Did you do that before reading the story?
praxis January 03, 2022 at 00:43 #638070
Quoting Nils Loc
Did you do that before reading the story?


No, it was the French poetry that got me doodling.
Leghorn January 04, 2022 at 23:13 #638857
Quoting praxis
The mod note is a good step towards fairness. To go all the way I suggest something like the following.

[Mod Note: This story was not written in good faith but as a moderator in-joke and just to have a laugh (or whatever). Considering the comments, it's probably an effective attempt to do that for the mods, so it will be left alone regardless of the harm. Oh, and the author didn’t even bother to meet the minimum word count and that’s okay because, well, to be honest, it’s okay because we’re mods.


Brilliant analysis! Best I’ve read in here yet: the author takes the mod note to my story as an exemplar, and modifies it to exactly describe the cliquish little community that produced and fostered this one—absolutely spot-on and brilliant.
praxis January 04, 2022 at 23:52 #638864
Reply to Leghorn

Ah, thank you for the kind compliment. I'm no Saint Telemachus but sometimes a person must take a stand against tyranny and uphold the virtues of truth and fairness!
Baden January 05, 2022 at 01:21 #638894
Quoting praxis
no Saint Telemachus


Yeah, Saint Takethepiss more like.
praxis January 05, 2022 at 10:16 #638990
Reply to Baden

Yeah, this from the guy that let Leghorn make him look like a fool with his mod note.
Baden January 05, 2022 at 11:50 #639016
Reply to praxis

It was a joke not an insult.
praxis January 07, 2022 at 20:58 #639920
:grimace: Ah, in my defense, I haven't traveled in the British Isles or such places much. We say "fuck with" in my neighborhood. Fortunately, I'm well accustomed to feeling stupid.
Baden January 07, 2022 at 21:48 #639935
Reply to praxis

Not to worry. I shouldn't take trans-atlantic translatability for granted when it comes to British and Irish slang :up:
Michael January 16, 2022 at 15:19 #643806
I liked the part where Marco died at the end.