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We’re not alone by AI/Benkei

Baden August 02, 2021 at 15:00 2575 views 30 comments Short Story Competition
"Ignition sequence start..."
"5... 4... 3... 2... 1... 0... All engines running."
"Lift off! We have a lift off! Thirty-two minutes past the hour; lift of of the Apollo 11."
People across the world held their breath as the first manned mission to the moon launched into space. Minutes later Neil, Buzz and Michael, the three astronauts, were clear of the earth's atmosphere, weightless in outer space. They tested the radio. Confirmed that their guidance converged. Everything was looking good.

The astronauts didn't know what to expect. Everything was new and though professional as they were, their nerves still played up. They were excited. They circled the Earth once and then started on their translunar injection trajectory. The moon became bigger and bigger as they entered an elliptic orbit, to finally land on their second turn. Neil would be the first to leave and step on the greyed out moon with the Earth a small blue ball in the sky.

"That's one small step for a man. One giant... " Neil Armstrong's head spun. He looked over to see what was in the corner of his eye. Something was coming over towards the lunar module. He saw it take shape. He saw it's grotesque, insectoid body. It stepped forward but faster than Neil's eyes could see it shrunk into the shadows. He shook his head and closed the door.

Neil felt the lurch of the spacecraft as it flipped end over end as it landed on its back while he held on for dear life. Neil knew it was about to get ugly. The spacecraft would probably explode, leaving his two compatriots behind. He had to be quick. Of course, on the off chance there would be alien life, the US army had insisted on taking guns aboard. Neil struggled to open the door but it was stuck from the impact. He pulled with all his might. Michael and Buzz were yelling inside: "What's going on? What's happening?" As Neil finally managed to open the door, Buzz shouted: "Watch out!" But it was too late. A rust-brown antenna whipped around Neil's neck, it's tip breaking the glass face guard. After all his training, Neil reflexively held his breath as he was tossed up towards the Earth, spinning. He wasn't slowing down.

Buzz yelled angrily, realised the danger they were in, aimed the modified M-60 at the window and squeezed the trigger. Glass shards exploded outwards, bullets whipped through the air hitting carapace with dull metallic clinks, like rain falling on a tin roof - with more or less the same effectiveness. A pincer grabbed the window and yanked it out of its hinges with a screech. It casually turned around, aimed and threw it at Neil. It crashed into him and he accelerated further towards Earth.

Michael and Buzz finally saw it as it broke through the doorway. They cried out in unison: "What the fuck!" The insectoid leaped on Buzz, the impact knocking him senseless as the pincers broke bones and tore his ligaments under the loud hiss of his his suit's air escaping. Michael froze and tried to back away but there was nowhere to go. The last thing he saw was a multifaceted reflection of himself in the soulless eye of his enemy. It's mandibles clicked and hissed, as the antenna on his head shot out like a spear, piercing Michael in the stomach. He sagged to his knees. He took out a serrated knifeand stabbed at it, but the creature's armour-plated, red exoskeleton was too hard. "No... stop," whispered Michael as he was lifted upside down, sliding on the antenna towards the cockroach's face. Michael's blood dripped on its mandibles, which shuddered to guzzle it into its throat. It casually flung Michael aside with a bone-shattering thud against the wall. As Michael's vision grew dark, he saw it tear off Buzz' arm and drink his blood. It looked at Earth through the tiny porthole. It rasped and clicked again. It carefully pressed a button on the console. And another. Michael faded.

Comments (30)

Nils Loc August 02, 2021 at 17:41 ¶ #574551
Hilarious! :party:

As soon as the alien appeared, insectoid on the moon, it became a riot.
praxis August 02, 2021 at 17:58 ¶ #574561
In Hawaii they call them B-52’s
_db August 03, 2021 at 00:25 ¶ #574701
Someone watched Starship Troopers recently :lol:
Outlander August 03, 2021 at 09:21 ¶ #574806
While you can definitely visualize yourself there with the characters in the story thanks to the level of detail, seems to be little more than a death scene/intro of a story as opposed to the full constitution of one. It almost seems like the author wished to write much more and continue what happens next but felt limited by the word count. Though the alien beginning to operate the ship leaves quite literally a world of possibility.. an invasion? Did the astronauts really come back? If so, was it really them?
Noble Dust August 04, 2021 at 22:42 ¶ #575475
I enjoyed the fever dream pace of this one.
Jack Cummins August 05, 2021 at 19:35 ¶ #575842
I think that the particular style of the writing was good. I felt drawn into the story very quickly and it felt so easy to read. It did seem as if there was a lot of skill in depicting a unique science fiction world very quickly.
Amity August 06, 2021 at 14:15 ¶ #576120
'We're not alone'.
That can be quite reassuring, comforting...then again...cue Star Trek music...and the mission.
'To boldly go where no man has gone before'...

Quoting Baden
"Ignition sequence start..."
"5... 4... 3... 2... 1... 0... All engines running."
"Lift off! We have a lift off! Thirty-two minutes past the hour; lift of of the Apollo 11


A spectacular lift off to a snappy story. One that starts out in the reality broadcast live across the world.
A spaceflight that could have gone so very, very wrong. *
But then, the imagination fires up.

First from the lunar module the 'Eagle' - Neil Armstrong
Quoting Baden
"That's one small step for a man. One giant... " Neil Armstrong's head spun. He looked over to see what was in the corner of his eye. Something was coming over towards the lunar module.


We step right into horror with a grotesque giant insect instead of that 'giant leap for mankind'.
In full attack mode.
So far, so very unpredictable. Shocked along with the characters who we actually know but don't.

Quoting Baden
A rust-brown antenna whipped around Neil's neck, it's tip breaking the glass face guard. After all his training, Neil reflexively held his breath as he was tossed up towards the Earth, spinning. He wasn't slowing down.


Everybody's worst nightmare. To spin out of control, floating into space - forever. Feeling it.
Meanwhile, back at the ranch...Michael and Buzz are hearing something else...
Quoting Baden
Glass shards exploded outwards, bullets whipped through the air hitting carapace with dull metallic clinks, like rain falling on a tin roof - with more or less the same effectiveness


[ In real life, Michael Collins was in the command module 'Columbia' alone. Did the author know this ?
It could have brought in another dimension ? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Apollo_11 ]

Anyway, the 2 in the 'Eagle' in unison yelling ''What the Fuck ?'' -
Funny, not quite what they had signed up for.
Aliens should be of the intelligent kind or at least those that can be shot. Maybe both.
You have to wonder about this search for ETs.
I hope they have a cloaking device cos we are really terrible beings. Also, if we are not alone but then become the victims...would we be treated as we behave unto Earth's 'lower' beings...
Would we be eaten ? ( sorry, this story has sent my thoughts flying as fast as a Neil spin )

I am going to have nightmares:
Quoting Baden
The last thing he saw was a multifaceted reflection of himself in the soulless eye of his enemy. It's mandibles clicked and hissed, as the antenna on his head shot out like a spear, piercing Michael in the stomach.

Ouch.

Quoting Baden
It looked at Earth through the tiny porthole. It rasped and clicked again. It carefully pressed a button on the console. And another.


It is coming for us.
'We Arere Not Alone II' - coming to a town near you :scream:

I thank the author but my nails aren't too happy. You owe me a manicure :nerd:

--------

* Here's a 10 min video about the Apollo 11 mission. A survival story.
The whole trip was nearly a disaster, and somehow the astronauts managed to make their way back to earth and not get trapped on the moon or die in space! Watch here to see how they made it out alive!'


Why Astronauts Were Almost Trapped On The Moon Forever (Apollo 11 Landing)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8IuSutVJc3o















180 Proof August 06, 2021 at 20:40 ¶ #576290
Kafkaesque but I'm a stickler for historical and technical details so having Michael Collins also in the LEM jarred me out of my suspension of disbelief. An opportunity was missed, I think, not having Collins completely isolated in the Command Module gradually losing it, even hallucinating to the point of wrecking the craft, with each orbit around the moon hearing Neil's and Buzz's screams over the radio fade in and fade out as the Collins passed overhead. More focus on the man-in-the-locked-room (à la buried alive) would give this tale a more Poe-like, even Lovecraftian, weirdness and horror.
Amity August 06, 2021 at 20:47 ¶ #576295
Quoting Amity
[ In real life, Michael Collins was in the command module 'Columbia' alone. Did the author know this ?
It could have brought in another dimension ? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Apollo_11 ]


Quoting 180 Proof
An opportunity was missed, I think, not having Collins completely isolated in the Command Module gradually losing it, even hallucinating to the point of wrecking the craft, with each orbit around the moon hearing Neil's and Buzz's screams over the radio fade in and fade out as the Collins passed overhead.


Yes !! That's what I'm talkin' about :cool:

Benkei August 07, 2021 at 05:35 ¶ #576499
Hanover August 08, 2021 at 01:23 ¶ #577134
It might have been more captivating if written through the view of a participant as opposed to 3rd person omniscient. It was very clear, but almost read like a newspaper article. I'd have liked to hear the characters first person account of all this.
Amity August 09, 2021 at 08:28 ¶ #577780
Quoting Hanover
It might have been more captivating if written through the view of a participant as opposed to 3rd person omniscient.


Which participant did you have in mind ?
praxis August 09, 2021 at 15:35 ¶ #577889
My only complaint is that it was like eating dry toast, action-packed but lacking emotion (butter and jam :yum: ), and as Hanover mentioned, read like a newspaper article.

The ending seemed to suggest that the big bug spying the earth through the porthole of the landing module, rasping something like “yum yum, gimme some”, and pressing buttons, was embarking on a journey to a big blue marble buffet. This made my imagination race forward. I could see the moon bug assimilating the knowledge of the astronauts after dinning on their cerebral cortex’s and using that know-how to fly back to earth. On the journey back it could report to Houston, impersonating one of the astronauts and using morse code or whatever, that there was indeed a problem, and contrive a story that some lunar anomaly had inexplicably metamorphosed him into a giant cockroach. Once on earth, it would refuse to leave the landing craft, feeling too hideously alien, though it would sneak out at night to munch on late night bar hoppers. Eventually in would go on trial for some unspecified wrong-doing.
Hanover August 09, 2021 at 15:58 ¶ #577899
Quoting Amity
Which participant did you have in mind ?


Any of the astronauts, but the insect's perspective might have been interesting too. That would have taken the story in different direction, explaining the insect's desire to protect his environment from these intruders, showing his fear and his emotions. Maybe we need to better understand why blood thirsty insects do as they do.
thewonder August 09, 2021 at 18:13 ¶ #577941
Michael and Buzz screaming, "What the fuck!?"...classic!
180 Proof August 08, 2022 at 08:36 ¶ #726584
Reply to Benkei I may use this (below) inspired by your story.
Quoting 180 Proof
Kafkaesque but I'm a stickler for historical and technical details so having Michael Collins also in the LEM jarred me out of my suspension of disbelief. An opportunity was missed, I think, not having Collins completely isolated in the Command Module gradually losing it, even hallucinating to the point of wrecking the craft, with each orbit around the moon hearing Neil's and Buzz's screams over the radio fade in and fade out as the Collins passed overhead. More focus on the man-in-the-locked-room (à la buried alive) would give this tale a more Poe-like, even Lovecraftian, weirdness and horror.

:victory: :death:

Reply to Amity
Benkei August 11, 2022 at 15:43 ¶ #727950
@Amity @180 Proof I'm not done yet (I still want to do one more point of view) but was wondering what you guys thought of this version.

"Ignition sequence start..."
"5... 4... 3... 2... 1... 0... All engines running."
"Lift off! We have a lift off! Thirty-two minutes past the hour; lift off of the Apollo 11."
People across the world held their breath as the first manned mission to the moon launched into space. Minutes later Neil, Buzz and Michael, the three astronauts, were clear of the earth's atmosphere, weightless in outer space. They tested the radio. Confirmed that their guidance converged. Everything was looking good.

The astronauts didn't know what to expect. Everything was new and though professional as they were, their nerves still played up. They were excited. They circled the Earth once and then started on their translunar injection trajectory. The moon became bigger and bigger as they entered an elliptic orbit, to finally have the Eagle detach from Columbia. Michael stayed behind as Neil and Buzz landed with the Eagle on the moon. Neil would be the first to step on the greyed out moon with the Earth a small blue ball in the sky.

Neil
"That's one small step for a man. One giant... " I stop as something distracts me. Something moved to the left of me. I spin around. Something’s coming towards me. “Guys… there’s something out there”. I see it take shape. It’s a grotesque, large insect. I take a step forward to get a better look but faster than I can see it shrinks into the shadows. I shake my head.

“What is it”, asks Buzz.

“Never mind”, I reply distractedly.

I go about taking samples and after a while I return to the Eagle. As I climb onto the ladder, I feel the spacecraft lurch as it starts to flip over. I hold on for dear life as it rolls over several times before ending on its roof. That… can’t be good. I need to get Buzz out before the Eagle explodes. On the off chance there would be alien life, the US army had insisted on taking guns aboard. I have to be quick though. I clamber over to get to the door. I try to pull it open but it’s stuck from the impact. Buzz is yelling at me but I can’t hear a thing with the helmet on and the door closed. I get my feet on the doorframe and pull with all my might. The door starts to budge. I see Buzz’ surprise as my faceguard shatters and I’m thrown up and away from the Eagle. Reflexively, I hold my breath as I spin away.

Buzz
I bang my helmet against the wall as the lander rolls over several times. I get up and climb up at the door. I look outside as Neil shows up. "What's going on? What's happening?": I yell but he can’t hear me. He’s pulling on the door. Static comes alive on the speakers. It’s Michael back in the Columbia: “How the hell did you move from the landing site? What happened?” As Neil finally manages to open the door, the light is suddenly blacked out by a dark shape. "Watch out!" But it was too late. A rust-brown antenna whipped around Neil's neck, it's tip breaking the glass faceguard. He’s tossed up towards the Columbia, spinning and isn’t slowing down.

I yell angrily, knowing the danger I’m in. I pull the gun cabinet open and jam a magazine in one of the guns. I aim the modified M-60 at the porthole and squeeze the trigger. Glass shards explode outwards, bullets whip through the air hitting carapace with dull metallic clinks, like rain falling on a tin roof - with more or less the same effectiveness. A two-fingered hand grabs the window and yanks it out of its hinges with a screech. It casually turns around, aims and throws it at Neil. It crashes into him and he accelerates further.

"What the fuck!" The thing leaps at me, grabs my arms, crushes the air out of me and breaks bones. I hear a hiss of my suit and I know I’m done for. The speaker blares: “Answer me Buzz. What’s going on?” As my vision dims, I notice my multifaceted reflection in its soulless eye. It rasps and pain explodes in my arm.

Dictyoptera
[i]I wake. Tremors. Rock falling?

No. It is rhythm. Life.

I will hunt.

I stand. Ancient dust falls. Filiform uncurls and feels. Rhythm is nearby.

I run towards it. Light sparkles of shell. No. Brood mother births larva. It moves. I hide. I look and wait. One in sky too.

I sneak closer. Larva plays dirt. I wait.

Larva walks to brood mother. I kill brood mother, then I eat larvae. Now.

I run. Relish the hunt! I lift brood mother. Hmm… no rhythm to brood mother. Not life? Larva still moves. I grab it. Warm. Strange. Throw at sky father.

More rhythm in brood mother. I move to see. Stonespitter is loud song. My body answers. I like. I open brood mother. Return her to sky father.

I drop into brood mother. Strange larva captured! Only one. Disappointment.

Sound like rocks crumpling. What is it? It gone again.

I look closer at larva. Edible? I pull antennae off. Water leaves. I drink. I like.

Brood mother not life. Light flash. Filiform push light. Nothing happens. Other light. Push. Another light. Rocks crumpling again. Push same. Rocks crumpling.

Brood mother listens. Brood mother mine.[/i]
Amity August 12, 2022 at 09:12 ¶ #728277
Quoting Benkei
I'm not done yet (I still want to do one more point of view) but was wondering what you guys thought of this version.


This other POV should be the climax, yes?
That of Michael in the sky father.
We wait in high suspense as to the next step or flight of Dic who has already dealt with brood mother and her larvae.

I love the introduction of Dic's view of the world and humans.
All the senses employed.

Quoting Benkei
I wake. Tremors. Rock falling?


Feeling and curiosity as to the source of danger.

Quoting Benkei
No. It is rhythm. Life.


Extra-lunar life form with a strong, flowing pulse.

Quoting Benkei
I will hunt.


Hungry or angry?

Quoting Benkei
More rhythm in brood mother. I move to see. Stonespitter is loud song. My body answers. I like. I open brood mother. Return her to sky father.


Dic's view and naming of the modified M-60 as 'Stonespitter'.
How does his body answer?
Hearing it as a loud song and turned on by it! Hmm...
Cue reproductive cycle?

Quoting Benkei
Sound like rocks crumpling. What is it? It gone again.


Again, the importance of sound and how Dic tries to make sense of it.
Like humans using similes or metaphors.
A frantic Michael from the sky father:
Quoting Benkei
The speaker blares: “Answer me Buzz. What’s going on?”


Quoting Benkei
I look closer at larva. Edible? I pull antennae off. Water leaves. I drink. I like.


Curiosity and exploration without fear using all senses.
Taste.
View of human arms as antennae. Is that all we use to feel our way through life...
No. We are more than bodies.
Our antennae can be our instincts looking out for and interpreting subtle signs...

Exploring external and internal space.

'Water leaves'.
I love this.
Its ambiguity.

It made me think of humans as water sacs.
And other fluids coming and going.
Dic loves human blood. Now got a taste for it...

Quoting Benkei
Brood mother not life. Light flash. Filiform push light. Nothing happens. Other light. Push. Another light. Rocks crumpling again. Push same. Rocks crumpling.


Dic now pushing console lights to see what will happen. This way progress.
Again, the sound of Michael...
A strong rock crumbling.

Quoting Benkei
Brood mother listens. Brood mother mine.


Dic has sussed out the 2-way communication. The Eagle now occupied and owned.

What next...?

This story explores the external and internal environments of meaning-seeking beings.
The impact of how and why we need to explore... the power and the morality...
Who or what dominates our skies?
Really enjoyed the dialogue, and the use of language.
The distinct characters. Their thoughts and emotions.

More, please!
:smile:








Amity August 12, 2022 at 09:15 ¶ #728278
One thing confused me.
Why all the port-hole activity if the door is open...?
Amity August 12, 2022 at 10:45 ¶ #728298
We Are Not Alone

Amity August 26, 2022 at 18:56 ¶ #733397
Quoting Benkei
Amity 180 Proof I'm not done yet (I still want to do one more point of view) but was wondering what you guys thought of this version.


@Benkei
Well, you got my response but so far nothing from @180 Proof?
Are you waiting for him?

It's been 14 days.
Where are you? Searching for inspiration?
Look no further:
https://www.theguardian.com/science/2022/aug/26/apollo-space-moon-missions-photographs-remastered-neil-armstrong




Benkei August 26, 2022 at 19:05 ¶ #733400
Reply to Amity Working on another story in between. Had a stomach flu. Life happening. Writing up adventures for D&D because I is nerd. :nerd: I'm afraid finishing this will still be a way off. Sorry. Did really appreciate the comments though.

The bug's body "answered" because it reflected the bullets in the same rhythm but agree it's not very clear. I'll think about working more on that. Also don't like the stupid repetition of "something" when in Neil's perspective but didn't originally pick up on that on a first read through.

About the port-hole, the door started to open when Neil was lifting with all his strength but he got killed before he managed to open it fully. Our sweet bug only managed that.

Those pics are cool. Always imagined Neill as more buff but he looks like a pushover. No wonder he got killed first.
Amity August 26, 2022 at 19:19 ¶ #733404
Quoting Benkei
I'm afraid finishing this will still be a way off. Sorry. Did really appreciate the comments though.


:up:
Stay well.





180 Proof August 26, 2022 at 20:41 ¶ #733423
Quoting Benkei
Writing up adventures for D&D because I is nerd. :nerd:

For 5e or an older edition? What do you think of the retroclones (e.g. OSE, S&W, OSRIC)? Or any of the OSR games (e.g. The Black Hack)? I've been trying to nudge my video game-addled nephews toward more narrative, crunch-free RPGs for over a decade without much luck but have gotten them interested in "streamlining" their games. Btw, I haven't played / GM'd in decades, I just like to (design &) watch. :nerd: :up:
Amity August 26, 2022 at 21:06 ¶ #733426
Reply to 180 Proof
Me no understand Nerdish :groan:
Benkei August 27, 2022 at 04:56 ¶ #733520
Reply to Amity Quiet or you'll startle the nerds.

Reply to 180 Proof 5e D&D. A bit by necessity, because it's what all the players already knew and we're now playing online (everybody is too busy). I'm using dndbeyond.com, share all the books in the campaign and added a brilliant chrome plugin called abovevtt and we also see each other dice rolls as if it's live.

We groupchat via Discord and I can send private messages. The extension has maps for combats, including live ones which does add something and it helps with larger parties (I know you're not a fan, you prefer pen and paper). All in all, it's working for us.
180 Proof August 27, 2022 at 04:58 ¶ #733522
Reply to Benkei Impressive. :cool:

I/we couldn't make vtt work well enough (for me, at least) to keep it going ...
Quoting 180 Proof
Even before the pandemic, Roll20 & Discord seemed fairly popular; they'd turned me off, however, when I'd played some "virtual tabletop" sessions with my nephews and their father/my brother last year (I live in the US southeast, they in the southwest & pacific northwest 3 time-zones away), maybe because playing via screens allowed for too many distractions and much less social immediacy.

So I'm always a little jealous (even though I'm not an active participant) when I hear of gaming groups that manage "regular" onlinr sessions.
Amity August 27, 2022 at 08:28 ¶ #733553
Quoting Benkei
Quiet or you'll startle the nerds.

:zip:

Benkei August 27, 2022 at 15:16 ¶ #733595
Quoting 180 Proof
I/we couldn't make vtt work well enough (for me, at least) to keep it going ...


It's useless without dndbeyond.com but I assume you had that? We were positively surprised with the ease of setting it up, although I admit I do not setup random encounters on the fly. I have previously setup encounters in the system and pull them if a random encounter is called for to save time. I hated roll20 because it was way too difficult to setup and I didn't want to learn.
180 Proof August 29, 2022 at 07:49 ¶ #734155
Reply to Benkei DnD wasn't the game. Even if it had been, it's the lack of social-body language immediacy of playing remotely that had, quite frankly, alienated me from the shared experience of roleplaying.